you, in your fine purple cloak
derisive and dead-eyed, cold and haughty.
me, in a dull grey dress
sullen and shy, mentally guarded.

(a mouse and an eagle.
though isn’t that kind of
an insult to eagles?
you’re not exactly an eagle, after all.)

silence reigns, an unspoken challenge
to break it in my mind.
no, i decide, the end result is
not worth the effort.

you, staring at the clock
above my head with fixed eyes.
me, staring unblinkingly out the window
maybe i’m watching you.

you, chin tilted up
snooty and uppity.
me, unposed and uncaring –
i really do dislike you.

(an interlude: 
i don’t see you.
you don’t see me.
i never forget.)

me, with new habits and a
cobalt gown.
you, with old habits and a
ragged old dress.

tugging at a loose thread, you
break the silence.
snap. your sleeve is unraveling.
i have nothing to say to you.

there’s no apologies here.
you ramble now, nervous,
amusing me.
how things have changed.

3 thoughts on “1721”

  1. This is a beautiful poem and I see the use of parenthesis in stanzas- perhaps you wanted to add additional information to help the reader- like an end note).
    I like the metaphors used – comparing one to an eagle and one to a mouse – though was the purple gowned one the eagle or was it the grey dressed one -I wonder- I guess it might be either- depending on whose viewpoint you read the poem from.
    I like the part with ” me with new habits a cobalt gown”- habits can be taken literally like to refer to the gown and again to mean new behaviours- wonderful. And cobalt – do you mean she took a job as a radiographer or does cobalt mean she became tougher and couldn’t be hurt anymore- I wonder.
    The tides have changed- I hold the upper hand now and you are the nervous one- nice writing.
    Really enjoyed this poem.
    Thanks for sharing.


    1. Thank you!

      Yes, the parenthesis are for the extra information. Not quite as an endnote, but certainly to add in stray thoughts.

      As for the eagle/mouse metaphors, I did have a very clear idea of who was whom, and the gowns could be taken as a way to confuse the reader a bit. As you say it’s a case of viewpoint.

      Yes, it can. And no, she didn’t become a radiographer. Cobalt has its meanings.

      Again, thank you so much for the comment. I’m very happy that you enjoyed the poem 🙂


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